To the
people in Taiwan, we now face a grievous dilemma, to strengthen the foundation
our economy, or to secure our very right of living, wealth, or even justice? For
a long time we had been arguing about the conflict between the pursuit of
economic prosperity and the disadvantages it brought to the people who are at a
lower social status. Can we ignore the minority’s right of living just for the
sake of our economy, can the government sign any agreement that may harm the
right of the minority without concerning them first?
For instance, China is now a prosperous
and wealthy nation as we know, however the people living in the country side of
China have a total opposite life in contrast with those living in the city. For
the sake of the economy, Chinese government established a policy that by monopolizing
the price of agricultural products in order to raise the price of other
industrial material, and because of this the farmers in China live a rough, destitute
life. There’s no deny that China did build a modern industrial foundation from
nothing, however this financial plunder of China’s country side seriously
weakened the labor force of China, twisting the price of merchandises and stocks,
most important of all, it brought severe social inequality upon the people
living in the country side, and further extended the Urban-rural gap in China.
Unlike China, in Taiwan we didn’t
sacrifice our entire agricultural economy to exchange the flourish of
industrial business. The gap between urban and country area are way much
smaller compared to China, but we still face the same question, will we, can we
sacrifice some people’s interests in order to benefit the whole nation? Take a
look at the issue of the infamous ECFA (Economic Cooperation Framework
Agreement), ECFA agrees to Import nearly six hundred Chinese agricultural
products that were used to be restricted to protect our own agricultural
business, and these now unrestricted products will surely bring devastating
impact on our agricultural business, leave thousands of famers lost their life
support. And if we reduced or even stopped the exporting of the agricultural products,
it will definitely bring mass impact on our export-based economy.
Searching
for the true justice for the minority is the key to dissolve the unbalanced conflict
between economic status and people’s rights. Of course we can’t ignore the
minority because if we leave the gap between the poor and the wealthy getting
bigger, we will face the same problem that China now racking their brain with.
Social inequality, the mass loss of human resources, and serious Urban-rural
gap, these problems rot the roots of a country’s economy, if we don’t have a
sense of trying to prevent these things from happening, Taiwan’s economy will
eventually reach a dead end. When the roots were all rotten, how can the plant
grow higher and stronger?
First of all I will like to say that the issue you are trying to present is worth discussing because it is the problem that matters to everyone of us. However, I think your title is too general, you need to come up with something more specific for the definition of money and justice are too wide. What do you mean when you say justice? Do you mean justice in law? or justice in society? Also the word money is too general a term too be used, sometimes when you want to achieve something you are not working on it just because you want to gain money but something else instead. Second, I really like how you divide your paragraphs. They are divided and each represented something. However, the similarity of the paragraphs are too great. Although it is supposed to be constructed on the big idea the evidences you provided are basically similar. I think you need to come up with a different example if you want to convince the reader. Also, the examples you provided need more specific explanations and the cause-effect than just simply past on with it. After all, I think you did an excellent job. It is a hard topic and you managed it well so far.
回覆刪除I must admit that I chose MONEY because if we don't need the standard of our lives improving, then the new stone era or metalwork times would no longer exist. We have to keep pushing our economy, we will keep destroying the environment or something else, the only thing which needs to be clarified is that we have to learn how to damage less.
回覆刪除this topic has been a big problem for a long long time(sigh
回覆刪除first, i think you can change the word justice in your title to fairness or other words, because when we saw "money and justice", we may think about issues that talk about the relationship between market and morality
second, maybe u can find more materials like how other countries strike a balance between majority's welfare and minority's rights and interests to support your point
btw, u have a wrong-spelling word in paragraph 3: " leave thousands of famers lost their life support"
Although taking care of minority is important, I think improving the society is more significant. If we lay great importance on the welfare of poor people and don't make progress on the economy, the society will lose competitiveness. Take the policy of implementing ETC for example. If we use the ETC,many people will lose their job. But it is a big improvement in technology. What should we do?
回覆刪除I am not sure what your main point is. Are you supposing that we should fulfilled true equality in our society? And it somehow makes me think about the communism, which has been proved unworkable in the end. If it is related to your statement, can you explain your idea corresponding to the communism ?
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